Having been familiar already with the original fic (in fact, I suggested some improvements in the language, which sroni obligingly incorporated), I feel qualified to call this an improvement. The story is well and quietly told; the humor is nice but not overdone, the emotions likewise, and the characters as we know them can indeed be heard in the dialogue.
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Date: 2008-04-21 05:05 pm (UTC)This was nice. I’m glad to have seen it.