Okay, seriously, I rewrote the first one twice; I knew what I wanted to parallel, but it never quite clicked right until I took the second one and put it with it; then it worked together.
*hugs* Thanks. You called the two lines that are pretty much the center of the story for me.
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Date: 2008-04-26 07:40 pm (UTC)Okay, seriously, I rewrote the first one twice; I knew what I wanted to parallel, but it never quite clicked right until I took the second one and put it with it; then it worked together.
*hugs* Thanks. You called the two lines that are pretty much the center of the story for me.