SQUEEEEE! Oh dear Remixer, I am in awe! I can't believe how GOOD this is!
You've stripped it of the cheese that was so prevalent in the original and gave it a little bit of moodiness and tension--I couldn't shake the feeling that something was "off" about the whole situation, and when I found out it was such a shock! And you've managed to change all of the above without losing the sweetness of Neville's first mentor, and the wonder of his growth. AND oh, the last section is gorgeous! I loved the tone of finality that it carried, almost like...heh, forgive me, but it was almost like closing the book after the last chapter.
The whole thing, in fact, read like a bedtime story. It had the tone of a storybook narrator talking to a young child, a moral, and even a kind of fairy godmother! Haha, I don't know if that made sense to you, but it was something I really enjoyed thinking about, and something that is so perfect for wee!Neville.
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Date: 2008-04-20 09:31 pm (UTC)You've stripped it of the cheese that was so prevalent in the original and gave it a little bit of moodiness and tension--I couldn't shake the feeling that something was "off" about the whole situation, and when I found out it was such a shock! And you've managed to change all of the above without losing the sweetness of Neville's first mentor, and the wonder of his growth. AND oh, the last section is gorgeous! I loved the tone of finality that it carried, almost like...heh, forgive me, but it was almost like closing the book after the last chapter.
The whole thing, in fact, read like a bedtime story. It had the tone of a storybook narrator talking to a young child, a moral, and even a kind of fairy godmother! Haha, I don't know if that made sense to you, but it was something I really enjoyed thinking about, and something that is so perfect for wee!Neville.
Thank you so much!