This was really powerful! I wanted to say first though, that it might be good to state in the summary or notes somewhere that this is John's PoV, because I couldn't really tell until the part with Nancy (though I might just be slow? I had JUST come from reading the original story and since it was in Rodney's PoV and it was him shifting, I just assumed--silly of me).
That being said, I really love John's voice through this. I could really feel him, like when he's wondering if losing your virginity counts when you're only there for part of it, or thinking about the other versions of the people he meets. This story really feels almost like a beginning, to me, because it's like John finally finds out that something he does in one reality might have repercussions in the rest of them, but that's never said for certain, so it's for us to decide. Great work!
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Date: 2008-04-20 01:37 pm (UTC)That being said, I really love John's voice through this. I could really feel him, like when he's wondering if losing your virginity counts when you're only there for part of it, or thinking about the other versions of the people he meets. This story really feels almost like a beginning, to me, because it's like John finally finds out that something he does in one reality might have repercussions in the rest of them, but that's never said for certain, so it's for us to decide. Great work!