I got interested in the three-body problem when it showed up on Numb3rs, so it was pretty cool to see it in this fic given the premise.
Putting this in Don's POV gave it a fresh perspective I really enjoyed. Now I have this yen for a third version (and how apropos would *that* be?) in Charlie's POV to complete the cycle. (One of my biggest fic ever - in more ways than one - was written in Don's POV until a beta suggested a second fic, also 24 pages long, telling the same story in Charlie's POV. Now I'm stuck repeating that feat with a ~40 page long Billy/Charlie fic.)
Never enough pegging fic out there and kudos for finding the one combination I missed when I ran through all the permutations during that fateful weekend. (I have a Megan/Colby pegging fic that needs finishing now, stat!) Top!Amita works for me because it's a position of power juxtaposed with the fact that she's truly powerless, indeed superfluous, in this particular sex act.
I enjoyed the format: interspersing the sex scene parts amongst the story leading up to them. Since the reader (ostensibly) already knows the story from the original it's a nice way to keep the tension high as you're taking the time to explore Don's thoughts, his history with Charlie and the effect Charlie has and has had on him.
Despite this being a Don-centric fic, I like that it illuminates Amita so well. The ending in particular really adds a dimension onto the original fic, showing us how affected she is by what's happened. I'm intrigued at how despite what she says she still extends the dinner (and sex) invitation. She seems committed to continuing to give Charlie what he wants, almost as if she's resigned to the fact that the only way she can keep Charlie is to share him - that she has to learn to be content with that fraction of him he can give her even if it kills her to have to watch as he shares his whole self with his brother.
You likely didn't know this, but Don/Amita is my *big* squick pairing in the fandom. (I can stomach Charlie/Larry much easier, as unappealing as they can be.) Amazingly it never registered at all during this fic, in fact I wrote up this entire post to this point without it even occurring to me. That, in itself, is a testament to your abilities. Brava.
So now that you've officially published a Numb3rs fic, any chance we can get you to play in the fandom again? /makes Dickens orphan eyes/ I co-run numb3rs100 and we accept fic up to 300 words as well as drabble series (we even publish sets of four prompts each month designed for writing drabble series). A drabble takes almost no time and I know the fandom would really eat up your work - they'd really appreciate it. Just consider it...
Okay, I shall stop myself now, but I figured a long comment was the best payment I could offer for doing such a lovely remix of my fic. Well, three comments technically. Like I did for another ficathon author earlier this year I am also posting a separate comment singling out quotes from the fic I particularly enjoyed.
So thank you again for remixing me! I'm pleased and honored and thrilled that you took this detour to write my fandom. I hope to see more N3 from you in the future.
P.S. One final note: How much did I love that you used plus signs as chapter separators like I do...
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Re: I GOT REMIXED BY POISONTASTER??!!
Date: 2008-04-28 07:37 pm (UTC)I got interested in the three-body problem when it showed up on Numb3rs, so it was pretty cool to see it in this fic given the premise.
Putting this in Don's POV gave it a fresh perspective I really enjoyed. Now I have this yen for a third version (and how apropos would *that* be?) in Charlie's POV to complete the cycle. (One of my biggest fic ever - in more ways than one - was written in Don's POV until a beta suggested a second fic, also 24 pages long, telling the same story in Charlie's POV. Now I'm stuck repeating that feat with a ~40 page long Billy/Charlie fic.)
Never enough pegging fic out there and kudos for finding the one combination I missed when I ran through all the permutations during that fateful weekend. (I have a Megan/Colby pegging fic that needs finishing now, stat!) Top!Amita works for me because it's a position of power juxtaposed with the fact that she's truly powerless, indeed superfluous, in this particular sex act.
I enjoyed the format: interspersing the sex scene parts amongst the story leading up to them. Since the reader (ostensibly) already knows the story from the original it's a nice way to keep the tension high as you're taking the time to explore Don's thoughts, his history with Charlie and the effect Charlie has and has had on him.
Despite this being a Don-centric fic, I like that it illuminates Amita so well. The ending in particular really adds a dimension onto the original fic, showing us how affected she is by what's happened. I'm intrigued at how despite what she says she still extends the dinner (and sex) invitation. She seems committed to continuing to give Charlie what he wants, almost as if she's resigned to the fact that the only way she can keep Charlie is to share him - that she has to learn to be content with that fraction of him he can give her even if it kills her to have to watch as he shares his whole self with his brother.
You likely didn't know this, but Don/Amita is my *big* squick pairing in the fandom. (I can stomach Charlie/Larry much easier, as unappealing as they can be.) Amazingly it never registered at all during this fic, in fact I wrote up this entire post to this point without it even occurring to me. That, in itself, is a testament to your abilities. Brava.
So now that you've officially published a Numb3rs fic, any chance we can get you to play in the fandom again? /makes Dickens orphan eyes/ I co-run
Okay, I shall stop myself now, but I figured a long comment was the best payment I could offer for doing such a lovely remix of my fic. Well, three comments technically. Like I did for another ficathon author earlier this year I am also posting a separate comment singling out quotes from the fic I particularly enjoyed.
So thank you again for remixing me! I'm pleased and honored and thrilled that you took this detour to write my fandom. I hope to see more N3 from you in the future.
P.S. One final note: How much did I love that you used plus signs as chapter separators like I do...