What a lovely remix. I liked the way you showed Sirius's desire to fly, to escape.

Remus looked up, shooting Sirius a withering look. "I don't think even the Fidelius could stand up to the sight of me. Even if it could, I wouldn't want to frighten the birds."

He laughed, but Sirius shook his head. Remus seemed to see nothing but damage when he looked in a mirror, but Sirius saw resilience and quiet charm and a wholeness that he had long since given up finding in himself. "You look just the same to me," he said, not sure how to express it. "Same old Moony."

Remus looked startled, then stared at his paper again. Sirius smiled.

This was my favorite part of the original, and I think you've done a great job of showing Sirius's side of the conversation.