She stared at him, bra dangling from her hand.

"Locks," said Jack. "They're not just for the Milky Way," he added after a moment, and waved the door shut.

That part made me giggle.

Lovely work. I like the awkwardnes and sorrow laced throughout it for Elizabeth, and how Jack is just trying to be there for her. Understated, yet deep beyond what we can see. That's largely the sense I got from the show too. Great job.