Wow, this was *amazing*. I hadn't read etben's original story, and so I checked that out first before diving into the remix. I'm glad I did, because it helped highlight the changes and additions you made and created this incredible, bittersweet sense of poignancy. I love the original and I think etben did amazing things with her Ray POV in that, but this is...well, my Fraser bias is showing, because this offers such a great perspective on Fraser in all his fucked-up glory. This absolutely broke my heart:
When I woke that dawn to find her already up and cleaning, my breath caught in sheer delight. 'Victoria,' I thought to myself, 'is a morning person.' I imagined a future of early morning runs and leisurely, intimate breakfasts while the rest of the world lay abed.
Sometimes I am astounded by the breadth and depth of my own stupidity.
Gah. Fraser! And the backstory with Vecchio was so well-done. I love that particular explanation for what their relationship was like: they were lovers but couldn't love one another, and the relationship damaged Fraser a bit. You handled it well here: you made it seem very sad and human and believable; it's clear Vecchio wasn't a bad guy (and indeed, I'm glad you didn't take it in that direction) but he couldn't be with Fraser, either. It's sad, but it's realistic and it adds a new texture and dimension to the remix. Very well done, sirrah, and I eagerly await the reveal so I can shake your virtual hand!
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When I woke that dawn to find her already up and cleaning, my breath caught in sheer delight. 'Victoria,' I thought to myself, 'is a morning person.' I imagined a future of early morning runs and leisurely, intimate breakfasts while the rest of the world lay abed.
Sometimes I am astounded by the breadth and depth of my own stupidity.
Gah. Fraser! And the backstory with Vecchio was so well-done. I love that particular explanation for what their relationship was like: they were lovers but couldn't love one another, and the relationship damaged Fraser a bit. You handled it well here: you made it seem very sad and human and believable; it's clear Vecchio wasn't a bad guy (and indeed, I'm glad you didn't take it in that direction) but he couldn't be with Fraser, either. It's sad, but it's realistic and it adds a new texture and dimension to the remix. Very well done, sirrah, and I eagerly await the reveal so I can shake your virtual hand!