You know, I really enjoy your style, here, your use of fragments and commas, especially. The broken, jerky narrative fits so well with what Wilson's feeling, especially the way you've left out a lot of the subjects in the sentences: like Wilson isn't really there, isn't really performing these actions...I think it completely underscores his loneliness, and I love that you've used form to emphasize content. It works very well with the distancing second person POV, too. And the last line works so well, so hopelessly, with the framing dialogue. Awesome.